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Some people feel that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is a better in the countryside.

#people #city #life #countryside
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It is
frequent
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 topic of discussion that living in a
city
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 is becoming increasingly common among individuals than living in the
countryside
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.
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 ,
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 it is
understandible
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understandable
 that it is beneficial for
people
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 to live in a
city
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 .I agree with the view of living in the
countryside
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 It is worth considering why many
people
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 support
to live
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living
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 in a
city
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. The
city
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 provides
people
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good
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 conditions.
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 is because there are water supply, electricity,heating,
sewerage
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 system in the
city
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.
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, they can easily live with these possibilities .
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addition
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people
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 can be given
city
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 higher job progression.
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 is because companies in the
city
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 help
people
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 achieve the
succesful
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successful
 career they want.
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Consequently
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 they can cover all their family expenses and needs through
job
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the job
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 with
high
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 salary. I ,
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,would argue that living in
the
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a
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 rural area is
good
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a good
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 option. First and foremost, life in the rural area has fresh air for breathing and comfort. Because There are fewer industrial factories,vehicles and buildings than
cities
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in cities
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.
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 , in turn , can reduce catching diseases and viruses among rural
residants
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residents
.
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, one of the best benefits of living in the
countryside
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 is
piaceful
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peaceful
 and
quite
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quiet
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.
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 is because there are no crowds. If
countrysides
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the countrysides
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 have more traffic that
contribute
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contributes
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 to the noise ,
population
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the population
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 of
village
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the village
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 may experience depression and anxiety .
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 can lead them
moving
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 away from
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countryside
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the countryside
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. In conclusion,though living in the
city
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 is more useful,I think that living in the
countryside
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 brings an avalanche of positive outcomes.
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