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There is no shortage of debates
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about armed
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forces
 in our modern
society
.İt is true that not just now
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the war
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 in our contemporary world.
Nowdays
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due to
 increasing demand on armed
forces
.The discussion about whether
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or not
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 wars have become
issue
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an issue
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 in our modern
society
.
Although
 most
people
 would generally agree that armed
forces
 few would deny that
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.More and more
people
 are choosing to armed
forces
 .
This
 raises the issue of whether.Recent research indicates that the number of
people
 who
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 is creasing. On the
one
hand
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 there may be
obvious
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an obvious
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 argument that
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.
One
 of the main reasons that armed
forces
.
This
 means that
war
.Another reason can be
that
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 armed
forces
 .
One
 of the factors which have brought
this
 about is
war
.
One
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 the other hand l agree with the viewpoint that armed
forces
.
That
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 first step to be taken would be to
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.To alleviate the situation
people
 should not
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.I believe that armed
forces
 would certainly ameliorate the situation.
This
 is
because
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war
.
Secondly
,we will talk about the
war
.
Finally
,we will focus armed
forces
.
To sum
up
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 briefly,all things
considered
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 it is my opinion
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 has many
significiant
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significant
 negative effects on
society
.
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 it cannot be denied that
this
 issue deserves more attention as it has
such
 serious effects on
society
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