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Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Different countries produce different
food
 items depending on factors including sunlight, soil, and rainfall.
While
 some
people
 suggest growing all the
food
 in their own country, many believe it is better to import it.
Although
 harvesting your own produce has its benefits, it is equally important to bring in
food
 from outside. Farming is one of the oldest and most important professions in the
world
 and the agriculture industry plays a significant role in the prosperity of a country. Refraining from trading
food
 enables farmers to thrive as much of the population buys locally sourced meat and vegetables.
In addition
, it lowers expenses since imported products cost a fortune. Surely,
this
 strengthens the argument for generating items within the nation.
Conversely
, farmers
also
 do well by exporting their crops across the globe. In fact, there is a huge demand and value for some foods that can only be cultivated in specific regions.
Secondly
, many
people
 have dietary restrictions
due to
 health and allergies,
while
 some just crave to explore various cuisines from different parts of the
world
. For these reasons, getting
food
 from around the
world
 is highly beneficial for a nation. With the advent of globalisation and social media,
people
 today, even from remote corners of the earth, are not only more connected than ever but
also
 aware of eating options everywhere.
While
 it has its advantages, it is slightly outdated to keep
people
 restricted to local produce. I believe every country should adapt to the need of today's changing
world
 and start importing
food
 from other nations.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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