Despite a large number of gyms, a sedentary lifestyle is gaining popularity in the contemporary world. What problems are associated with this? What solutions can you suggest?

Nowadays, people are more likely to choose immobile
habit
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, in spite of the growing number of gyms.
This
may lead
several
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issues which I will discuss below
coupled with
my opined solutions. First of all,
problems
led by
this
lifestyle
can
be
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obviously be seen in
health
problems
such
as obesity and heart
diseases
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. Being
a
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sedentary means you have
lack
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of
physicial
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physical
activities so that it would lead to the minimum consumption of our energy. If it happens to our body, the energy will be altered to be body fats affecting
to
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our weight
increasement
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increment
.
Secondly
, mental
health
problem
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will
also
be considered as an issue associated with
sedentary
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lifestyle
. Sitting in their place, their happiness would be decreased because they only produced less
endorpine
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endorphin
endorphins
or
oxcitocine
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oxytocin
hormones related to happiness.
This
will influence mental
health
illness
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like having stress
due to
inbalance
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lifestyle
as overwhelming
works
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.
Coupled with
the
exessive
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use of
internet
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the internet
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or social media
due to
the sedentary life, it will
also
increase the mental
health
problems
potential. Turning to possible solutions, I suggest
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changing
hanging
the
habit
will be the best way. We have to make exercise
as
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our new
habit
. We can take our time in the morning for doing
physicial
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physical
activities
such
as walking
along
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our house and
do
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jogging. Making an exciting ambience to do
such
a new
habit
will
also
helpful
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to increase our motivation. As experienced by my family, we created a
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sport
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culture by walking together every morning and trying to motivate each other.
Also
, we can decrease our engagement with online social media
with
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creating
off-line
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communities which able to encourage us to have
physicial
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physical
stimulations
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stimulation
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.
For example
, community outdoor who have similar hobbies with us or
sport
-related communities. As can be seen in Indonesia's public
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, they have been
giving
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a role model to do some
sport
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sports
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activies
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activities
. They gave instances to did some
sport
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sports
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competitions like
doing
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tennis
sport
and football.
To sum up
, many
problems
have been posited
resulted
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of
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sedentary
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a sedentary
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lifestyle
.
Accordingly
, the best alternative to overcome
this
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problems
is by changing
lifestyle
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your lifestyle
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to be more friendly with exercising,
doing
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and doing
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pysicial activites untill
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physical activities until
having communities which can support sports
in particular
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • physical inactivity
  • health problems
  • weight gain
  • obesity
  • energy levels
  • chronic illnesses
  • mental health
  • productivity
  • focus
  • social isolation
  • exercise
  • physical fitness
  • active lifestyle
  • health benefits
  • physical health
  • mental well-being
  • leisure activities
  • regular physical activity
  • physical exercise
  • cardiovascular health
  • strength training
  • flexibility
  • endurance
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