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It has been suggested that everyone in the world want to own a car, a TV and a fridge. Do you think disadvantages of such development outweigh advantages?

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Every
people
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 around the
world
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 desire to have his or her own vehicle,
TV
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 and fridge
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 in our modern era we want to have machines. As we live in an age of advanced technology we need new equipment cell phones, laptops, iceboxes and automobiles but in my point of view, there are more drawbacks rather than improvements. For about many years humans invented new types of
technologies
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 which are changed the
world
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.
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, if we literally want to have some kind of innovation we would work by heart on it.
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, with the help of
such
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kind
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 of
technologies
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 we would keep our meal good, we can do any projects online, we can make online meetings and conferences with
people
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 from other types of the
world
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, and we can easily get for
a long distances
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long distances
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, watch football or some kind of
TV
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 shows. Everything has a good side
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 a bad side and we should recollect that.
Fact
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, when society watches
TV
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 every time absolutely young generation it has bad effects.
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, these days the public becomes fatter,
people
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 become lazy, spend a lot of electricity for nothing important to them, vehicles use more petrol and will cause harm to the ozone layer, on the other ,hand it rises more accidents. For more years ,
technologies
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 frequently change and become more needful for humanity.
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, there are several bad and negative sides rather than positive sides. The most per cent of
people
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's cup of tea to have their own
technologies
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 like car, fridges and
TV
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. In faster-developing
world
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 innovations are the most needful things for all
people
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 around the
world
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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