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the diagram below shows how a refrigerator works.

the diagram below shows how a refrigerator works.
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The presented diagram depicts different parts of
refrigerator
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the refrigerator
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 and how it works.
This
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 system can be described as follows: A refrigerator contains a capillary tube which is all around the system, a compressor and a
condenser
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.
In addition
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, when the
condenser
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push
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pushes
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 high_pressure liquid
to
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into
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 the capillary tube , Meanwhile, the evaporation of heat from food is proceeding
in
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to
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refrigerate
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refrigeration
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 and transfer to the liquid. So, warm low_prussure
gas
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 flows to the compressor which can
turns
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turn
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 it
to
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into
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the
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a
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 hot high-pressure
gas
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.
While
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,
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apply
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 heat is transferred to
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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.
Moreover
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,
this
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 high-pressure
gas
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is continued
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has continued
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 the cycle and
move
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moves
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 to
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condenser
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the condenser
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 in order to keep the refrigerator cabin cool.
To sum up
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, it can be said that the
condenser
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, compressor and evaporator are the most important components of the system. It can be observed that refrigerators are working with two
state
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states
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 of matter high-pressure liquid and high-pressure
gas
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 but with unsimilar temperatures.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words condenser, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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