the diagram below shows how a refrigerator works.

the diagram below shows how a refrigerator works.
The presented diagram depicts different parts of
refrigerator
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and how it works.
This
system can be described as follows: A refrigerator contains a capillary tube which is all around the system, a compressor and a
condenser
.
In addition
, when the
condenser
push
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high_pressure liquid
to
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the capillary tube , Meanwhile, the evaporation of heat from food is proceeding
in
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to
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refrigerate
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and transfer to the liquid. So, warm low_prussure
gas
flows to the compressor which can
turns
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it
to
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the
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hot high-pressure
gas
.
While
,
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heat is transferred to
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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.
Moreover
,
this
high-pressure
gas
is continued
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the cycle and
move
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to
condenser
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the condenser
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in order to keep the refrigerator cabin cool.
To sum up
, it can be said that the
condenser
, compressor and evaporator are the most important components of the system. It can be observed that refrigerators are working with two
state
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of matter high-pressure liquid and high-pressure
gas
but with unsimilar temperatures.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words condenser, gas with synonyms.
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