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You are taking a holiday in a place recommended by your local travel agent, you have had a wonderful time. You have promised to write to him and let him know what you think of his suggestion. Write a letter to your travel agent as promised, and let him know what you have been doing and what you are going to do before the end of the journey.

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Dear Hari, You might remember that I had promised to write to you about what I think of the destination that you recommended for my vacation. I am having a great time here in
Kerala
. Every evening I go
for
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swimming in the nearby waterslide and I think it is much more fun in swimming in the natural waterslides than in the pool.
Food
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 is excellent here and yesterday I tried the famous "Karimeen Pollichatu" and it was delicious. Local people are very cooperative and have reasonable knowledge
in
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 English,
hence
 communication is not an issue.
Kerala
 is very popular for "Unity in Diversity", as it has
the
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 mixture of different cultures. Tomorrow I am planning to visit
Kerala
 Kalamandalam and
in
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there I will be watching festivals and art forms of
Kerala
 like "Kathakali" and "Mohiniyattam",
,
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Afterwards I will visit the Thrissur district which is
also
 known as the "Land Of
Poorams
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Programs
". I must state that your choice of the place for my vacation was excellent and when I return I will show you all the breathtaking photographs that I took and I will share my
overall
 experience. Yours Sincerely, John
Submitted by sudheer.radhakrishnan on

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