In the future, it seems more difficult to live on Earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching another planet to live, such as Mars. To disagree with this statement?

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In current times when humans are discovering and inventing different
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of technologies,they
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try to find somewhere else to live like Mars. Many people think that living on
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will be more difficult in future, they want to move
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said that government should
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more and more on researching
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on other
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completely disagree with
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I’ll support my opinion with some reasons.
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it safe before investing
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and it’s our responsibility to make it
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for
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coming generations.
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but it is not possible for everyone to move on it.
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, living on Mars is very difficult because they’re several reasons, first one is, there is no water on Mars. Water is a very basic necessity for human king
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no symptoms of air
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found on Mars yet.
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, we should focus on taking care of our
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and investing
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sustainable technologies and practices.
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renewable energy sources, reducing waste and natural habitats.
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, investing
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sustainable technologies can create lots of jobs.
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use of fossil fuels, which main reason
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pollution on
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idea but it
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of
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. It will not a practical solution for many humans.
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it and
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somewhere else.
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will ensure that our
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habitats for coming generations.
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