Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give your oponion.

Nowadays, scientific research, business, and
academic
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the academic
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word
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world
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have developed and getting
advance
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advancing
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each time. In spite of
those improvement
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that improvement
those improvements
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, there is debate
weather
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whether
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the
information
should be shared freely or not. In my opinion,
spread
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spreading
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the
information
as wide as it can be is more important since it can help enhance the quality of life through science, business, and
academic
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academics
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by avoiding the previous
mistake
.
Firstly
, some people believe that
informations
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information
pieces of information
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are too valuable to share freely because they had found the
information
through
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in
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expensive
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an expensive
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way. They need money to
fulfill
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fulfil
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all of the funding that they had given.
For example
, a
scientist
conduct
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an expensive experiment and
the
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tend to publish it with restricted access.
This
will lead
public
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to public
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pay to open that paper, so from
this
point
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the
scientist
will gain more money and even get the experiment’s money back. But, to avoid large
outcome
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outcomes
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, they can join the fully funded research.
On the other hand
, quality of life will become better because people learn from previous experiences and take other actions to prevent
mistake
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mistakes
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. From sources like journals, people can correct the
last
problems and find the solution which
lead
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leads
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to new
better
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and better
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invention.
For example
,
the
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apply
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scientist
who
study
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studies
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on fermentation process
publish
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publishes
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all the data,
mistake
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mistakes
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, and materials from
previous
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the previous
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experiment
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experiments
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.
Then
the other
scientist
who
want
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wants
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to study about
similar
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the similar
a similar
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subject will learn from that journal and can prevent the
mistake
which done by the first
scientist
.
To conclude
, I’m on the side where
information
should be shared freely because there are many ways to conduct fully funded research, business, and academic which will lead to gain
better
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a better
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life through innovation
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