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crime rates are likely to decline due to the advancements in technology. which will help prevent and solve crimes in an easier way. do you agree or disagree?

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In recent
years
,
technology
 has become more and more developed, with anticipation of it becoming a great source which we can rely on in our work lives. Many claim that in a few
years
,
technology
 will help solve
crimes
 in an easier way and even prevent them from happening at all. I agree with
this
 statement and will explain my opinion in
this
 essay.
Firstly
,
technology
 will make crime-solving easier since it's a massive
information
 source. Computer-based systems are able to collect every piece of
information
 about every single person in the world and accurately connect relevant pieces. It has no limit of
information
 it can gather up in
their
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 system, other than humans who can only collect a limited number of details.
As a result
, having a computerised "detective partner" work with humans on a certain case can be much easier, since it already has a large amount of knowledge.
For example
, experts claim that in around five
years
, AI (= artificial intelligence) will know every single piece of
information
 about every citizen in the world, and with the quality of self-thought skill that AI has, it can simply impact every case solving and improve its process.
Moreover
,
crimes
 will become faster to solve thanks to working with a computer rather than a man. Every person has emotional and physical needs,
such
 as the need for food and water, eight hours of sleep and time for leisure to spend with their families.
On the other hand
, computers have no needs and will be able to work all day and night long, with no distractions.
Consequently
, it will make crime-solving faster by at least half of the normal time it usually takes.
Furthermore
, having
crimes
 solved easily will affect people in a psychological way and will prevent committing
crimes
 in the first place. Since computers are expected to develop throughout the
years
 and suppose to make every crime solved, people would not want to risk their future and commit fidelities, since they know they will be caught.
As a result
, the psychological effects of knowing you will get caught performing any crime will prevent criminals perform them in the first place.
For instance
, a burglar who is planning to rob a bank would not perform that crime, since he knows that he will be directly found and sentenced.
Although
 some say that computers are not as smart as people and are afraid that
technology
 will lead to false accusations, I tend to concede and believe that future systems will be developed enough to find the right criminal and will lead to a safer society. In conclusion, I agree that
crimes
 will be easier to solve in the future and even prevent them from happening at all, thanks to advanced
technology
.
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