The charts show average levels of participation in education and the highest education level of adults from 2000 to 2010 in Singapore.

The charts show average levels of participation in education and the highest education level of adults from 2000 to 2010 in Singapore.
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The bar chart gives information about the average year students spend at
school
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,
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the pie charts detail the different educational levels of Singaporean adults between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, people tend to spend more time in
school
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and there is a growth between boys and girls over the
years
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.
In addition
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, more and more people in
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country achieved higher qualifications during the period surveyed. Regarding the bar chart, in 2000, Singaporean men spent about 9
years
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in
school
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, slightly higher than women, only about 8
years
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. Over a 10-year period, the number of
years
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of schooling for adult males increased steadily, reaching a peak of almost 12
years
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, the figure for women remained nearly the same for the first 3
years
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before showing a bit of an improvement, finishing at less than 9
years
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at the end
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of the period. As can be seen from the pie charts, in 2000, nearly one-third of Singapore's population finished high
school
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. The figures for primary and secondary schools were almost identical, at 30% respectively, compared to nearly 8% studying for a
master
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degree. After 10
years
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, the level of education people in Singapore achieved was significantly higher, with nearly 33% of college degrees, and only 2% finished primary
school
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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