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The diagram shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

The diagram shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
The process diagram depicts some methods of producing instant noodles including eight main steps.
Overall
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, instant noodles are made by keeping all the flour stocks in the storage sailors in the beginning and labelling the final products
at the end
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. First of all, trucks are being used to distribute all of the flour commodities to storage silos. After that, available flour starches are mixed with water and oil with a mixer.
Next,
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they are rolled up into dough sheets by rollers.
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, they are processed into dough strips and
are
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turned into noodle discs afterwards. Before they are packed, the noodles are cooked in oil and
then
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 dried.
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, they put
into
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them into
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 cups where some vegetables with spices
added
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.
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, the final items are labelled and sealed.
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 but not least, they are ready to be sold and distributed in stores as they have been fully packed.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • mixing ingredients
  • dough preparation
  • sheeting
  • steaming
  • cutting techniques
  • dehydration
  • deep-frying
  • cooling system
  • packaging
  • quality control
  • production line
  • mass production
  • food preservation
  • convenience food
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