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In today's world, private companies rather than government pay for and conduct most scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the private
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 is doing notable
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 in scientific exploration. Some expound that it is a good development because they can invest more in
research
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 others oppose
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 the security vulnerability. I equivocate the latter notion and believe that demerits outweigh the merits. In
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 essay, I shall propagate my viewpoint with reasons. On one hand, there are certain advantages when a private company jumps into scientific
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 enough capital. They can purchase the latest equipment, develop hi-tech laboratories and invest in employees' growth.
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, during the
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 pandemic, a lot of private companies
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research
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 to produce the vaccination.
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, it helped the government to able to produce a huge quantity of vital dosage.
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, sometimes
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 that the private
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 may
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 better in scientific
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 and help the authorities. Another school of thought considered that scientific
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 should be the sole responsibility of the state. To elaborate, some private companies willingly invest to attain some unfair advantages
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 in the drugs or nuclear industry.
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, if a private company finances any pharmaceutical company, they want a high margin of profit and it may lead to a rise in life-saving medicines or may
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compromise quality.
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, in the nuclear
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, the government should have full control and must not
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 private entrepreneurs to participate because of national security. In conclusion,
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 high capital
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 easy for the private
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 to hire more qualified staff and buy the latest equipment but the government should control all scientific
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 for the safety and security of the state.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • private sector
  • government funding
  • technological innovation
  • competitive nature
  • profitable outcomes
  • conflict of interest
  • corporate bias
  • economic stimulation
  • public interest
  • non-profitable
  • public welfare
  • commercial applications
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