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Smacking children is the best way to discipline. Do you extend agree or disagree?

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Smiting
children
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 is the best
way
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 to refine their behaviour. Nowadays some
parents
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 utilize and choose
this
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way
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that is
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 smashing
child
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 to bring up but I slightly agree with that.
This
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 essay will argue why smacking is not an easy
way
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 to control
children
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.
To begin
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 with,
children
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 are disciplined for their
mistakes
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 or bad actions by their
parents
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. They will not repeat again these in the future life because they have fear namely
child
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 scares from
parents
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. Cause of contemporary
children
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 are spoilt, to bring up them
parents
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 should smack the
child
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 rather than explain in a good
way
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.
For example
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, If a
child
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 has grown spoilt, explaining his, or her
mistakes
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 to him or her in a good
way
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 is difficult, namely should be affected from the psychical side by the
parents
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. There were some good aspects of smashing
child
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 is to discipline.
On the other hand
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, there are a number of positive sides to bringing up
children
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. Smacking
children
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 always is not a good
way
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 which is done
mistakes
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. More smiting
children
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 will affect their emotions and they will be shy
that is
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 not meet people,
also
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 they not conversation with their friends,
further
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children
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 forget their own ideas. But
parents
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 explain their
child
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's
mistakes
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 with goodness, the
child
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's interest will increase day by day in new things and doing new work. If to say that only one word, smashing
child
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 to discipline will die his interesting about new life.
To sum up
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, smiting
children
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 may be the easy
way
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 to control their
children
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 but
this
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way
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 negatively affects the
child
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's character and horizon. I think that explaining is the best
way
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 to bring up a young
child
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