Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is sometimes argued that some people think only authorities and companies can contribute to
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the
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world. In my opinion, I believe that individuals
also
can play an important role
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the
environment
. On the one hand, there are arguments that governments and large companies should take responsibility to develop the
environment
. One of the main reasons can be that public campaigns organised by
government
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and
company
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are especially important because they can lead
population
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in protecting and encouraging their
behavior
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of
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our planet.
This
means that they may contribute to
population's
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awarness
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awareness
. Another reason can be that they are responsible for setting up policies and regulations that control
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behaviour of citizens.
On the other hand
, I am more
convienced
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convinced
that
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number of
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an individual
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individual
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also
should take responsibility
of
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the
environment
.
Firstly
, these days, human activities
causes
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increasingly growing air pollution
such
as burning fossil fuels for energy.
This
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human activities contribute to global warming.
Therefore
, it is crucial for humans to acknowledge their role in preserving our
environment
and make efforts to reduce activities that have negative impacts on the
environment
such
as adopting cleaner energy sources and raising eco-friendly habits.
Secondly
, more and more people
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their own vehicle when they commute to work.
For instance
, they should replace public
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transportation
instead
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their
privite
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private
car. In conclusion, it seems to me that raising eco-friendly habits of
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lead to
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and
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for the
environment
.
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  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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