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Some people think that the best way to solve global environment problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals believe that the better method to tackle environmental issues is to
rise
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raise
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the price of petrol. I totally disagree with
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 statement, and I
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would
 like to recommend some possible measures in order to improve
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 situation. To being with, there are
serveral
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several
 reasons why I believe that growing the
cost
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 of
fuel
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 is not the perfect solution.
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increase
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the
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 price of
fuel
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 can have a negative impact
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people
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 live and make the problem worsen.
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because
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 some
people
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 live in rural
area
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 or cities
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 poor
of
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infrastructure namely, public transport , which means
people
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 do not have
alternative
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than
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to
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 using vehicles.
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,
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increase
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increasing
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 the
cost
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 of petrol can
contributes
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 to
go
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going
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 up
of
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apply
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the
cost
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 of basic needs
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,
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 food, goods,
clothes
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and clothes
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,
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because
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is because
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 transfer these products via cars and trucks which
uesd
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use
fuel
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.
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,
increase
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 the gap between wealthy and poor
people
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 , and
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increase
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the
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poverty and encourage
people
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 to commit
crime
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a crime
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 in order to meet their
familiies
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family's
 responsibilities. Regarding
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alternative solutions to
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 issue , I think the government can make a huge difference by
adopating
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adopting
 some steps. The first
meausre
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measure
 the
authouirties
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authorities
 can make
improvement
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 in
public
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the public
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 transport system
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,
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 buses, subways,
railways
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and railways
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 to make it more convenient and faster to motivate
people
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 to utilize
it
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them
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.
Second
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 measure, incentivize
the
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companies ,schools, and
university
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universities
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 to
allows
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 students and employees to work or study from home.
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, these steps can assist to reduce the number of cars on the roads
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 CO2 footprint ,
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mitigat
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mitigate
 climate change and global warming. In conclusion, it seems to me that
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increasing
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 the
cost
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 of
fuel
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 is not
good
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a good
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 solution and I suggested effective methods to deal with environmental problems.
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