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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The table provides data about the
expenditure
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on
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 several categories in five different nations in a specific year.
Overall
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it is clear that
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expenditure
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 in all countries the highest was on food,
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drinks and tobacco,
whereas
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free time and education were the lowest. Looking at the table in more detail, we can see the proportion of spending
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consumer
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 on food, drinks, and tobacco was the top
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Turkey
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 and Ireland at 32.14% and 28.91 %, respectively.
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, The percentage of
expenditure
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 on food,
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drinks and tobacco
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 Italy and Sweden was
lowest
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 and they together approximately equal the spending of
Turkey
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consumer
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. Regarding
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clothing and footwear, Italy
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 spent
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 significant proportion of their money on clothing and footwear compared to other countries at 9% . In comparison,
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Turkey
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 ,Spain, and
Ireland
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Ireland's
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consumer
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 spending on clothing and footwear
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 the same amount of money just over 6%. In terms of leisure and education,
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Turkey
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 on free time and education is higher than other national at 4.35 %, and
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 Spain at 1.98%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, consumer, turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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