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Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● thank them for the photos and for the holiday ● explain why you didn’t write earlier ● invite them to come and stay with you

#month #holiday #friends #photos #friend #didn’t
Dear Min, Thank you for joining
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me on the holiday, I am really grateful for the
time
 we spent together at your home. That was the first
time
 I went overseas to travel, I feel glad to have you and Mary supporting me. It was a wonderful trip. Thank you so much for all the photos, especially the photo we took at Them
park
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, that was a group photo,
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 all enjoy it. I am keen on driving on the road to the beach and thank you for the local meal you recommended to me on Tuesday night, I remember the name of that meal and I will offer it to my family next
time
. I got home and prepared some stuff to back to work after that, so I cannot write a letter to you earlier. Next
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, if you are planning to come to my town on your holiday, I would love to invite you to come to my house and stay, you don’t have to find hotels to stay. I will guide you to some interesting places in town. Warm Regards, Mai Huong
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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