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Some people think that space exploration can benefit humans in a number of ways. Others think that it has several drawbacks. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
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 think that
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exploration
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 can benefit humans in many aspects.Others think that it has a number of drawbacks.In my opinion,I believe that it has many benefits to
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exploration
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. First of all,the benefit of
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exploration
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 is we can explore other species in
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.It will be interesting seeing some different living things that we have never seen before .
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, we can
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 take some pictures to have a memorable memory.
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, it will bring positive changes for humans
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 as information technology,transportation,industrial productivity and so on. Without
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 programs,we would not have GPS ,accurate weather prediction , and solar cells.These kinds of things are very common in our lives.It will change the technology to be better than nowadays.
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,
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exploration
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 has disadvantages, too.It will be very dangerous going to
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 .It is because it has s huge distance from Earth , and we must keep in mind when planning and executing a
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 mission that everything is moving.
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,it is costly. Many
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 cannot afford the amount of fees going to
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. It is very expensive for young
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 and others.
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 may vary in their opinion,I think that
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exploration
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 has many disadvantages and many
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 will not have a trip in
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.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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