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The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.
#water #usage #san #diego #california #rest #world
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The given pie charts give information about the percentage of
water
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 used for different purposes in
San
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Diego
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,
California
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 and the world as a whole. A quick glance at these graphs reveals that
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 most of
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water
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the water
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 is used for residential in
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Diego
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 and
California
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, agriculture accounts for the major
water
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 usage all over the world. Looking at the details, residential
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 consumption accounts for 60% and 39% relatively in
San
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Diego
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 and
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. By
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,
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 figure is much smaller worldwide, at only 8%. The opposite trend can be seen when it comes to the usage of
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 in agriculture.
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 accounts for a massive 69% of global
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 use, but only 17% and 28% of
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 usage in
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Diego
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 and
California
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 respectively. It is noticeable that there is no dramatic difference when comparing the figures for industrial
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 use. The percentage of
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 used by industry in
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Diego
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 and worldwide is equal, at 23%,
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 that in
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 is slightly higher, by 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, san, diego, california with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • households
  • significant
  • industrial use
  • implications
  • agriculture
  • geographical
  • climatic
  • economic factors
  • patterns
  • sustainability
  • practices
  • surprising
  • exceptionally
  • improvements
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