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The chart below shows the annual pay (thousands of US dollars) for doctors and other workers in seven countries in 2004.

The chart below shows the annual pay (thousands of US dollars) for doctors and other workers in seven countries in 2004.
The given bar chart illustrates the comparison of the doctor’s and other workers’ salaries in 7 different countries in 2004. In brief, the annual pay of doctors and other workers in the United States was the highest
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 respectively,
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 the other staff’s
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 in Germany, Czech and Italy is the lowest of all. Moving to the details, payment for doctors in the US was in the first place at 120 thousand dollars,
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 doctors in Finland can obtain only around $30, and it was the bottom
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. other countries show a small difference, with all of them except the US and Finland at 60 to 70.
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, other employees in the US could get the highest payment at over $40 thousand, and the salary of the workers in Germany, Italy and Czech was the
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 at $20 thousand. though the doctor’s salary in Finland is the bottom
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, normal staff was the third top
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words position with synonyms.
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