The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words
The diagram illustrates how
number
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a number
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of
tourists
visited a Caribbean Island over a period of 7 years.
Overall
,
at
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in
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the
end
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the total
number
of
tourists
was high despite the slow rise through the years. In the first year, they stood at 1
million
visitors
and rose constantly to reach 1.5
million
in 2012.
This
was followed by another constant increase,
although
much steeper, in 2015 when the
number
of travellers was about 2.7
million
.
However
,
this
upward trend was suddenly broken and
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percentage of
tourists
remained relatively static for one year. Eventually, the
number
of
tourists
saw a significant rise in 2017.
Moreover
,there are two places where
visitors
stayed
while
their trip.
At
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the beginning 0.25
million
visitors
stayed on cruise
ship
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ships
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whereas
, 0.75
million
visitors
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an island. Both of them experienced drastic fluctuations between 2010 and 2017 and
at
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in
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the end
number
of
visitor
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visitors
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stayed
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staying
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on
island
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the island
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was 1.5
million
likewise
, the
number
of
visitors
stayed on cruise
ship
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ships
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was 2
million
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists, million, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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