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The table below shows social and economic indicators for dour countries in 1994, according to united Nations statistics

The table below shows social and economic indicators for dour countries in 1994, according to united Nations statistics
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The given table illustrates social and economic indicators for dour countries
according to
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 United Nations statistics in 1994
Overall
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,
Japan
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 is the best country for annual income per person, life expectancy for birth, and adult literacy rate.
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, Canada is the country with the biggest consumption of calories.
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,
Zaire
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 is the country with the lowest of the four indicators.
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 with, the annual income for
Japan
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 is the highest at 15760, the second rank was Cabada at 11100, followed by
Peru
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 at 160 and the lowest was
Zaire
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 at 130.
Japan
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 became the highest
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life expectancy, people can live up to 78.
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Canadians are 76 years old.
Peru
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 was the third rank at 51 and the lowest for life expectancy was
Zaire
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 at 47. People in Canada consumed 3326 calories per person, and 2846 in
Japan
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.
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, in
Peru
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, the daily calorie supply per person was 1947 and the lowest was in
Zaire
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 in number 1749. Canada and
Japan
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 have the same percentage of adult literacy rate at 99% and
Peru
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 was 68 and the
last
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 was
Zaire
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 at 34%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, zaire, peru with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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