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Why university students find it difficult to adapt to University life?

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university
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 is an exciting milestone
of
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 high
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 graduates.
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, once the freshman year starts, not many think the transition from high
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 to
university
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a
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pleasant experience. High
school
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 and
university
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 teaching
style
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 differ significantly. There are 2 main reasons why
students
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 find it difficult to adapt to
university
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 life and how
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the pre-university
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university
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education
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system
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 can improve the situation.
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,
while
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 most traditional high
school
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education
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system
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 is spoon-feeding the
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,
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university
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the university
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education
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system
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 involves more self-studying. High
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 assignments are leaning towards memorization and answering factual questions.
Students
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 are given the exact
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 instructions to complete assignments. Goods mark will be easily achieved if you follow exactly what the teachers ask. In comparison,
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university
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the university
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 will require
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 to do projects, presentations, and a lot of mind-provoking essays. Lecturers usually provide only high-level guidance to ensure
students
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 can elaborate their stance and be creative. Some
students
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 might like
this
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 style because they want to express themselves, but many
struggle
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 as for the past 12 years of
education
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 they have been only followers.
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university
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education
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system
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 should start encouraging
students
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 to think on their own by introducing more
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student led
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 projects and argumentative essays.
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,
students
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 are forced to be
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 as there is a strict schedule to follow. Disciplinary action
taken
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 for those who show signs of laziness or lack of attention during the class.
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,
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university
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the university
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 will train
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student
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students
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 to be responsible and
self-discipline
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. The
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 room will be too big for
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the lecturer
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 to pay attention to every single
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.
Students
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 often skip lectures and don’t set aside time
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 self-study the materials.
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, many freshman
students
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 fail a lot of their classes.
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school
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education
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system
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 should foster self-discipline and less
hand holding
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. In conclusion, many
students
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 often struggle to keep up with
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university
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the university
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education
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system
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due to
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big
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education
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system
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 gap.
University
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’s teaching style
require
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 a lot of self-studying and research,
as well as
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 self-discipline which many high
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students
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 haven’t been trained on before getting into
university
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. If
pre-
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the pre-university
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university
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education
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system
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 is going to improve in
this
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 area, the transition will be smoother.

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