Some feel that individuals should have the right to strike in all jobs while others feel there are exceptions. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals claim that everybody
have
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the
right
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to
protest
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in their jobs;
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,
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others believe that they cannot
strike
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in all works.
This
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essay will emphasize both sides of doing strikes in all work areas. For
employees
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strike
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is a way to make their
sound
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heard. In general, workers
protest
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because of their low wages. To
protest
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with a crowd, make their
sound
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louder and because of
this
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employer
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employers
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take the employees more
serious
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.
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, in
England
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strikes are often and workers have the
right
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to express their thoughts about their
works
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work
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and usually managers are hearing their
sound
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and changing some conditions
accordingly
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to their needs.
On the other hand
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, some people agree that there are some exceptional jobs that they should not have the
right
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to
strike
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. As
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mentioned above workers
protesting
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to make
them
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themselves
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sound
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heard;
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, it would not be fair to take
others
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right
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to go to work
while
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doing
strike
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.
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, in metro or train strikes employees stop working and because of them all the transportation
system
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systems
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disrupt.
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this
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, the jobs that
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others should not have the
right
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to
protest
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. Obesity is a disease which can pass through genes. There are so many diseases which
effect
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the
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people who are already genetically vulnerable. Even though unhealthy food triggers obesity
genetic
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is a very crucial point which causes overweight.
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, parents should not be responsible
about
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their
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genes which passed to their children because they do not have any control over
this
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process. Recent research concluded that 65% of overweight children have
genetic
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tendency to become obese.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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