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the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 to and in 2018.

the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 to and in 2018.
#information #families #country #income
The given bar chart illustrates information about
average
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the average
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 weekly expenditure by households in a particular nation between 1968 and 2018.
It is clear that
 four
categories
 decreased from 1968 to 2018
while
 spending on three different
categories
 increased in the end. Only one figure showed no change. In terms of decreased
categories
, the food section showed
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 change. In 1968, 35% of families spent their income on food but it dramatically reduced to around 17% after 40 years. The figure for clothing and
footware
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footwear
also
 significantly dropped from 10% to 5% in the end. Two more
categories
, fuel and power and personal goods slightly fell as well. With
the
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apply
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reference to increased sections, spending on leisure was the biggest growth. It increased more than double from around 9% to approximately 23%. Spending on housing
was
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increased almost double from 10% to below 20%. The figure for transport rose from around 8% to below 15% in the end. Only spending on household goods did not change and reached approximately 8%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words categories with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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