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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent to do you agree?

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There is a debate on how much
one
 should evolve in terms of
behavior
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 and lifestyle when
one
 moves to another country. Some people are of
belief
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 that it is healthy to adapt to another
culture
 as it aids in smooth
amalgmation
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amalgamation
 into the new society and helps in individual growth.
However
, I believe
while
 it is important to be flexible in your practices it is paramount that people retain their unique identity as it defines who they truly are and gives a new perspective to the existing
culture
 . The advantage of adapting
into
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the
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 new
culture
 makes it easier for
one
 to blend into
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new society as
one
 quickly becomes accustomed to the food, routine and festivities of the new world.
For instance
, when
i
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 moved to Pakistan I had to unlearn my
culture
 back home to be able to make friends easily and avoid frequent spells of homesickness.
Also
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 it helps in individual growth as
one
 sees how
insignifcant
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insignificant
 some rigid customs in our
culture
 can be when viewed from
global
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 lens. The disadvantages are that in the process of adaptation
one
 forgoes his or her roots,
the
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 breath of fresh air that a new
culture
 can bring into an
exisiting
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existing
one
 is lost.
Furthermore
, in the pursuit of blending
one
 might start feeling unhappy for not being true to themselves.
This
 can take a toll on
the
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mental health and have dire consequences. In conclusion,
while
 it is important to be flexible and
easy going
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 when it comes to practices as it helps in better adaption which is a major life skill and
also
 a great asset in
todays
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hyperglobalized
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hyper globalized
hyper globalised
 world
one
 needs to make sure to be true to themselves in the entire process and take their unique roots and
culture
 wherever they may go. Finding the right balance between the extremes is the right way to go about it.
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