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Some people say that the only reason for /earning a foreign language Is In order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
it is argued that some
people
 think studying other languages must be the only excuse because of travelling or working
in
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overseas. I fully agree with that opinion
due to
 easier activities in foreign
country
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countries
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.
Firstly
, leaving
to
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for
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other
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another
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country
 means
people
 should have
same
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language
 in order to make a conversation. Imagine, if visitors ask to
indigenious
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indigenous
people
 about the way to
destination
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the destination
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with
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 their own
language
 and no one can understand every word in their speech. Visitors may have no given answer and will be confused
accross
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across
 the
country
.
Therefore
, it is compulsory to learn
foreign
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language
 when travelling
Secondly
, working
in
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overseas will be difficult if
people
 can't understand the
language
 of their company.
However
, every company has
a
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data,
procedure
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procedures
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, etc with their own
language
.
Labors
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 have to read in order to work properly. The
last
, most
people
 are
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 with their own
language
while
live
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 in their city. It is not important to use
other
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another language
other languages
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language
 in
origin
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the origin
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country
 except for business and school.
For instance
, many
of
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people
 across the world whether in Japan, Russia, Korea, etc are likely not to learn
other
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another language
other languages
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language
while
 they are in their own
country
. The data of
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the united
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united
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United
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nation
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 shows only Asian
people
 learn other languages but Europe, America, Africa,
Australia
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and Australia
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 don't have any interest to learn
new
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language
.
To sum up
, the statement of travelling and working
in
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overseas
are
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is
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 the only reason for learning
other
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another
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language
 is the most I agree. Because
,
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apply
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 travelling and working need conversation
while
 the
united
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United
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 nation's data show most
people
 are tending to speak in their own
language
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