The pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live
The pie chart shows the percentage of
people
living in Australia with different nationalities and the table illustrates where these people
dwell.
Overall
, A majority of residents were born in Australia. It is obvious that urban areas are the most favorable
place to live for Australian.
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favourable
According to
the pie chart, Australia is the birthplace of 73% population. Dwellers from other countries accounted for 14%, which is twice as much as the UK. Besides
, a similar allocation can be seen in the proportion of those who were born in New Zealand, China, and the Netherlands at 3%, 2%, and 1% respectively.
Looking more closely at the table, 99% of Chinese people
prefer living in a town compared to the proportion of New Zealand (80%). Meanwhile, such
differences across categories are not seen in UK and Netherlands. Lastly
, the Australian natives accounted for 17% of people
living in remote areas.Submitted by joyce.ta213 on
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