The chart gives information about marriage and children in a selection countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the statistic of babies born compared to the average age at first marriage in nine countries.
Overall
, the trend for the average age of a merger does not equivalent to the children
they have. For example
, Danish tend to marry after 32, but they only have 1-2 kids only. While
Kenya has the highest number
of children
(more than three), the married age on 22.
As appear in the chart, there are four countries which have a high average wedding number
(around 30-33) and have 1-2 children
(the countries are Australia, Netherlands, United Kingdom and Denmark). Whereas
, Kenya and India had the most children
(more than 2) but they chose to stay with a partner in their early 20s (22 and 24, respectively). Surprisingly, the Chinese prefer to build a family at around 26 but have the lowest number
of children
, which only have no more than 2 offspring. Lastly
, women in Brazil and Denmark choose to marry in their middle 20s (26 and 27, respectively) with a well-balanced number
of babies they have (1-2 babies).Submitted by twiggseducationbdg on
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