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Overpopulation is a major problem in city centers. What are the reason? How can it be curbed?

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These days the number of
overpopulation
 is increasing dramatically and major
problem
 in city centres.So many countries appear different problems and turn around the globe
problem
. Nowadays
overpopulation
 is a major
problem
 in city centres.Many
people
 are coming to popular
cities
 from the
countryside
 because mainly
cities
 have developed and have a variety of factories, companies and other things.
Moreover
,
cities
 have very a lot of jobs.
People
 always want to live being developed
cities
.So
people
 going to countries from the
countryside
 and ansbsoʻnpcpssBspboʻ prefer
cities
 rather than villages.Onevcpvp the one hand, it is good to live in
cities
 because there are all conditions in
cities
.
On the other hand
, it is good to live in a
village
 because there are different sights and landscapes, and mountains. If the government want to curb, they will build different factories, and companies in the
countryside
 and they stay
countryside
.But there are no different works so
people
 go to
cities
 from the
village
.If the government opens a variety of clothes shops, cafes, and other things, it appears working opportunity.
Therefore
, the
countryside
 will be developed.Government need to open universities in the
village
. Adults go to universities in the
village
.If
overpopulation
 is a major
problem
 in the city centre,they will build high-sky buildings in
cities
. In conclusion, I would assert that
overpopulation
 is becoming a major
problem
 in
cities
 as the world's population continues to grow.
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