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Overpopulation is a major problem in city centers. What are the reason? How can it be curbed?

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These days the number of
overpopulation
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 is increasing dramatically and major
problem
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 in city centres.So many countries appear different problems and turn around the globe
problem
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. Nowadays
overpopulation
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 is a major
problem
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 in city centres.Many
people
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 are coming to popular
cities
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 from the
countryside
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 because mainly
cities
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 have developed and have a variety of factories, companies and other things.
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,
cities
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 have very a lot of jobs.
People
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 always want to live being developed
cities
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.So
people
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 going to countries from the
countryside
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 and ansbsoʻnpcpssBspboʻ prefer
cities
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 rather than villages.Onevcpvp the one hand, it is good to live in
cities
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 because there are all conditions in
cities
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.
On the other hand
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, it is good to live in a
village
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 because there are different sights and landscapes, and mountains. If the government want to curb, they will build different factories, and companies in the
countryside
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 and they stay
countryside
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.But there are no different works so
people
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 go to
cities
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 from the
village
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.If the government opens a variety of clothes shops, cafes, and other things, it appears working opportunity.
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, the
countryside
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 will be developed.Government need to open universities in the
village
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. Adults go to universities in the
village
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.If
overpopulation
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 is a major
problem
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 in the city centre,they will build high-sky buildings in
cities
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. In conclusion, I would assert that
overpopulation
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 is becoming a major
problem
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 in
cities
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 as the world's population continues to grow.

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