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The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts provide information about the proportion of
water
usage
 for several
purposes
,
while
 the bar graph illustrates the amount of aquatic
usage
 in various countries. Both were taken in the year 2000 and measured in percentages.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the amount of
water
 used was dominant for
agriculture
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agricultural
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application
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applications
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,
while
 Canada was high for industrial objectives and India for agricultural
usage
.
According to
 the pie charts, the
water
 intake was high for
agriculture
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agricultural
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purposes
, which accounted for seven in ten, followed by industrial
usage
 at nearly a quarter, more than three times higher than that of agriculture. Other than that, domestic
purposes
 showed the least at just below one in ten, nearly three times lower than industrial intake. Turning to the bar charts data, Canada and India showed the most
water
usage
 than other countries. Canada used 80% of
water
 for industrial
purposes
, eight times higher than New
Zealand
 for the same category.
Furthermore
, India
also
 utilized almost 100% of
water
 for agricultural needs, which was more than doubled compared to New
Zealand
 at 44% .
However
, for domestic
usage
, New
Zealand
 accounted
at
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for
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 46% of
water
 being used, making New
Zealand
 the highest among all countries.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, purposes, zealand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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