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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

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Many are of the belief that
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 should be free to the public because of their enormous potential to educate
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 others feel charging money helps ensure the quality of the
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 therein. I concede the benefits of the latter argument but would still side with those who advocate free admissions. The main reason that many are in support of charging money is that it sustains both the maintenance and quality of exhibitions. A good example of
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 would be the
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 of Modern
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 (
MoMA
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) in New York City.
MoMA
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 is generally regarded as one of the finest
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 in the world and is famous not only for its well-maintained facade but
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 for the ever-rotating artworks on display. They charge a nominal entrance fee in the neighbourhood of $20 a ticket and invest that money wisely to ensure a memorable experience for all
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-goers. Despite the advantages of a private
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such
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 as
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, I think making all
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 free would encourage more people to appreciate
art
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. A contrasting example with
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 would be a
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 just a few blocks away: The Metropolitan
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 of
Art
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. The MET has educated and uplifted millions of citizens regardless of their socioeconomic status. The wealthy who can afford
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 admission are likely to already have a deep appreciation of the arts
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 the leisure time to enjoy their practice. People, and children especially, from poorer backgrounds have fewer opportunities and free
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 are the best way to support appreciation of the arts en masse. In conclusion, the benefits of free
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 admissions, particularly for lower-income families, outweigh the benefits of charging. The bigger issue is how governments and other organisations can budget for free or relatively inexpensive
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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