Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.
People
have different views about what is the major environmental issue. Some individuals believe that protect
Wrong verb form
protecting
animals
and plants
from extinction should give prioritize
, others Replace the word
priority
people
think there are necessary environment
problems than Replace the word
environmental
animals
. In my opinion, global warming and pollution
are crucial
issues than preserving Correct quantifier usage
more crucial
animals
and plants
.
On the one hand, There are many reasons why some member of society support the idea that animals
should protect, To being with, animals
plays a significant roles
in Correct the article-noun agreement
role
production
of food. Add an article
the production
a production
This
because
we need Add a missing verb
is because
animals
and plants
in order to have healthy
diet and helps us build muscles Add an article
a healthy
,
because Remove the comma
apply
animals
meat consider rich by
protein and Change preposition
in
plant
have vitamins and minerals. Fix the agreement mistake
plants
Second
reason, we need Add an article
The second
A second
animals
and plants
in medical research to trial a new drugs
and make sure it safer for humans. Correct the article-noun agreement
new drugs
a new drug
Therefore
, this
will can contribute to enhance
Change the verb form
enhancing
health
of Add an article
the health
people
and will increase life expectancy.
On the other hand
, I agree with those who argue that there are many Correct quantifier usage
more improtant
improtant
Correct your spelling
important
issue
than Change to a plural noun
issues
animals
and plants
. Firstly
, global warming represents biggest
threat to the Change the article
the biggest
live
Replace the word
life
in
Change preposition
on
the
earth. To illustrate, global warming and global warming will cause to melting Correct article usage
apply
polar
ice caps and Change preposition
of polar
rasie
the Correct your spelling
raise
tepmperature
of Correct your spelling
temperature
earth
. As Correct article usage
the earth
result
, we can Correct article usage
a result
epxect
many Correct your spelling
expect
floodings
and rising Replace the word
floods
of
sea levels.Change preposition
apply
in other words
, this
have
a negative Change the verb form
has
impacts
on Correct the article-noun agreement
impact
people
,because this
can make damage for
their houses and Change preposition
to
Correct article usage
the quailty
quailty
of their Correct your spelling
quality
live
. Regarding Replace the word
lives
pollution
, contamination from vechiels
and Correct your spelling
vehicles
industrial
revolution in all forms namely, air, Correct article usage
the industrial
nosie
, Correct your spelling
noise
nose
water
can have Correct word choice
and water
detrimetnal
consequences Correct your spelling
detrimental
in
both Change preposition
for
animals
and Change noun form
animal's
animals'
mankind
life. Change noun form
mankind's
This
is because pollution
is the main cuase
of serious Correct your spelling
cause
dieases
Correct your spelling
diseases
such
as,
cancer, malaria, Remove the comma
apply
Correct word choice
and ebloa
ebloa
.
In conclusion, it seems to me that global warming and Correct your spelling
ebola
pollution
is consider
Change the verb form
is considered
the
more Correct article usage
apply
danger
issues to the ecosystem than Replace the word
dangerous
loss
Correct article usage
the loss
biodiversity
of animal species and Change preposition
of biodiversity
plants
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