Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

People
have different views about what is the major environmental issue. Some individuals believe that
protect
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protecting
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animals
and
plants
from extinction should give
prioritize
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, others
people
think there are necessary
environment
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environmental
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problems than
animals
. In my opinion, global warming and
pollution
are
crucial
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issues than preserving
animals
and
plants
. On the one hand, There are many reasons why some member of society support the idea that
animals
should protect, To being with,
animals
plays a significant
roles
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in
production
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the production
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of food.
This
because
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we need
animals
and
plants
in order to have
healthy
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diet and helps us build muscles
,
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because
animals
meat consider rich
by
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protein and
plant
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plants
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have vitamins and minerals.
Second
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reason, we need
animals
and
plants
in medical research to trial
a new drugs
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and make sure it safer for humans.
Therefore
,
this
will can contribute to
enhance
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health
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of
people
and will increase life expectancy.
On the other hand
, I agree with those who argue that there are many
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more improtant
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improtant
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important
issue
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issues
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than
animals
and
plants
.
Firstly
, global warming represents
biggest
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the biggest
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threat to the
live
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life
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in
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on
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the
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earth. To illustrate, global warming and global warming will cause to melting
polar
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of polar
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ice caps and
rasie
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raise
the
tepmperature
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temperature
of
earth
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the earth
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. As
result
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a result
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, we can
epxect
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expect
many
floodings
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and rising
of
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sea levels.
in other words
,
this
have
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a negative
impacts
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on
people
,because
this
can make damage
for
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to
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their houses and
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the quailty
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quailty
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quality
of their
live
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. Regarding
pollution
, contamination from
vechiels
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vehicles
and
industrial
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the industrial
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revolution in all forms namely, air,
nosie
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noise
nose
,
water
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and water
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can have
detrimetnal
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detrimental
consequences
in
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for
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both
animals
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animal's
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and
mankind
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mankind's
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life.
This
is because
pollution
is the main
cuase
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cause
of serious
dieases
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diseases
such
as
,
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cancer, malaria,
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and ebloa
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ebloa
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ebola
. In conclusion, it seems to me that global warming and
pollution
is consider
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is considered
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the
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more
danger
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dangerous
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issues to the ecosystem than
loss
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the loss
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biodiversity
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of biodiversity
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of animal species and
plants
.
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  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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