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The chart below gives information about how families on one country spent their weekly income 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families on one country spent their weekly income 1968 and in 2018.
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The bar chart illustrates the statistics about the
families
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 in the specific country who spent their revenue of themselves per week in 1986 and 2018.
It is clear that
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overall
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, the feeds and spare times were the main change during
this
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 period of time
also
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 the foods cost with
families
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 dropped off opposite of that the expenditure
from
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on
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 leisure activities with the
families
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 was a rise significantly.
Furthermore
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, household goods were not
any
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apply
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fluctuate between 1986 and 2018.
According to
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 these data, the average weekly spending by
families
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 eating was a decline noticeably and stood at just about 15% in 2018.
Moreover
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, in 2018 the average of cost clothing and footing and personal goods fall off about half of that in 1986 and stood at just about 5% and 4% respectively in 2018.
In addition
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, the expenditure
of
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on
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 spare time had more than two-fold until 2018
hence
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, it climbed up above 22%,
Also
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this
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 trend remained in Housing and transport costs so which
was
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were
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 about 18% and 13% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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