The diagram below shows be changes of a village in 1995 and now.

The maps illustrate the transformation of a hamlet from 1995 to the present. From an

overall

perspective, it is evident that the village has witnessed significant changes, cutting down natural beauty spots and farmland

while

adding more housing and other facilities. Over the period shown, the most striking development could be seen in the eastern area of the village in which the area used for agricultural purposes has been turned into a golf course.

Similarly

, the adjacent forest park has been converted into a tennis centre, and a car park has been added to the hotel to the southeast of the town. In the vicinity of the seafront, there used to be a fishing port, but it vanished completely. Because of

this

, the nearby fish market has been replaced with a number of apartments. Near the same place, a myriad of restaurants has now been constructed right on the sites where the shops used to be.

This

small community has witnessed an increase in the number of houses in the central area.

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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