In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an aging population creates problems for governments. Other people think there would be benefits if society had more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an aging population outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years, the life expectancy has widely increased.

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believe that the elderly cause many problems in the country, others argue that they could be beneficial to

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. I personally believe that their benefits and harms are equal. One significant problem that an increase in the elderly population causes is more retired

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is an issue because the government would need to provide food, clothes, and other important high-quality life amenities, without actually benefiting it, which would rather harm its economy.

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an increase in the

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health of citizens,

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are expected to

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longer. As more older

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are present in

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they might take the positions of fresh graduates leaving them without

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and increasing unemployment.

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can benefit from the presence of the elderly in it in terms of experience, knowledge, and wisdom. To illustrate, higher retirement age means more skilled workers in the

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field.

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, the majority of

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group are

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who have worked hard all their lives and have some cash to spend on entertaining themselves and providing for their new families. That indeed opposes the idea that seniors are of no benefit to

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and proves that

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age group does not contribute to the economy but has a lot to contribute to

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and inherits experience to young ones. In conclusion,

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population can cause a lot of problems in terms of the levels of unemployment and their lack of contribution in the

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field,

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category can actually contribute to both the

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and economy.

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Topic Vocabulary:

ageing population
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disadvantages
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experience
knowledge
contribution
economy
society
healthcare
youth employment
community
intergenerational support
volunteerism
mentorship
increased demand
pension costs
social welfare systems
workforce
productivity
intergenerational conflict
technological adaptability
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