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The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs illustrate the types of devices used by Canadian young people (aged 18 to 25) to watch television in two different years (2009 and 2019).
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 conventional
TV
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 was the most popular device in 2009,
whereas
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 in 2019, its place was taken by mobile phones. The least used device in the first period was the tablet,
while
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 in the second period, it was the conventional
TV
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. Regarding conventional
TV
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, which was predominant, accounting for a third of the usage in the first period, it was almost fully replaced by other types of devices, with only 4 per
cent
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 of young people using it.
On the contrary
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, tablets gained popularity, rising from 5 per
cent
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 to almost one-fifth of the total usage.
Furthermore
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, the pie charts
also
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 illustrate how new technologies changed the way
TV
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 content is consumed. Smartphones, which accounted for a mere 8 per
cent
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 in 2009, became the most preferred way to watch
TV
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 in 2019, with a share of more than a quarter.
Similarly
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, flat-screen TVs, gained 11 per
cent
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 over ten years (increasing from 15 to 26 per
cent
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).
In contrast
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, desktop computers lost almost a third of their share, decreasing from 18 to 12 per
cent
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.
Likewise
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, laptops, which accounted for one-fifth, declined to the same proportion as desktop computers.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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