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Band 8.5

You bought a laptop while you were travelling abroad. When you reached your native country you realised that some items were missing from the box. Write a letter to the representative of the company. In your letter, give details of the laptop and from where you bought it explain what has happened say what you want him/her to do about it

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Dear Sir, I would like to lodge a complaint against the missing items described in the product box of the HP Pavilion dv4 PC which was purchased from Dubai during my business trip. Recently, I bought a new HP laptop from an official store in the financial district, of Dubai. The laptop has a configuration of 16GB RAM, and 512 GB SSD with 16th generation Intel core i5 and is suitable for business requirements like presentation, longer battery life and better connectivity. The laptop was suggested by the store dealer
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 its popularity among the community with the added benefit of stability, reliability and longer serviceability. They
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 assured higher quality, one-button installation and complete items inside the sealed product box. After returning native country, I found an item like a portable charger missing inside it. In spite of a good store experience, the delivered product is incomplete and had a bad experience
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. I request you to look into the matter on an urgent basis as it is troubling my economic activities. Thanking you, Regards, ABC

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coherence cohesion
Ensure to introduce a clear and purposeful opening and closing to your letters, mirroring real-life correspondence styles for added authenticity and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Try to introduce a wider range of cohesive devices and paragraphing strategies to enhance the flow and readability of your writing.
task achievement
In addressing the task, make sure to cover all points required by the prompt comprehensively. Incorporate supporting details to each claim or statement for a more complete response.
task achievement
Considering the context and audience, adapt your writing tone to ensure it's always appropriate. Reflect on formal and informal scenarios to suit your language use.
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