The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden , Italy and Portugal beteween 1967 and 2007 .

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden , Italy and Portugal beteween 1967 and 2007 .
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The line chart displays the average
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carbon dioxide discharge per person in four different countries (the UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal) from 1967 to 2007.
It is clear that
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British and Swedish started with
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two
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, but
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substantial
evidence indicated both of the countries declined
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CO2
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by the end of the period. Yet, the remaining South Europe countries' figures grew steadily throughout the statistic.
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with, the
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in the UK stood at 10.5 metric tonnes in 1967,
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a slightly fell to 9 through 40 years.
Initially
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, Swedish held 8.5 metic tones, followed by peaked over 10, which
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close to the UK trend in 1977.
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, the
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dropped dramatically in the
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thirty years, eventually at 5 metric tonnes.
On the other hand
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, the chart shows Italy's carbon dioxide amount beginning
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approximately 4.1.
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, the
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in Italy continuously reached
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highest
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in 1977 and 1997, accounting for 6 and 7.5 respectively.
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, Portugal rose rapidly to 5 metric tonnes in the first thirty years, but merely no
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in 2007.
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