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future
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the current system will no longer.
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currently
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people
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also
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reason is
time saving
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technogy
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technology
is improving.
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in the world
people
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people
are changing the system.
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mean they convert everything doing by online.
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school teachers most probably doing class buy online.
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covid
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time
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school
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schools
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and
university
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already did online
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. Any other
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give an example .Sri Lanka covid
time
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,
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,
private
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class
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by online.Because of that
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educations now everything update.Some rural area
student
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going to university or classes want to expend so much money
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the
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traveling
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.and sometimes
four
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hours want to stand
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the road.So
by
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online not only
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time
there money
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saving.
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condition changing lifestyle of the coming new generation try to do everything
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explain above
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am agree
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with the statement.
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