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It has been suggested that primary children should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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 to studying the school’s main subjects, elementary children now nurtured gifted courses like swimming, chess, …
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, some people give
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 that schools should encourage children to learn how to grow
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 and take care of
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. In my perspective, the advantages of
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 approach outweigh the disadvantages. In order to start, if these are compulsory subjects, few
students
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 have to study without their own desires.
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 can have a negative effect
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 pupils’ learning results.
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, some primary
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 living in urban areas do not tend to plant vegetables
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 some living in apartments are not allowed to have pets. So for them, learning about raising
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 and keeping
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 will not be helpful.
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,
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 course can add more stress to
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. Primary kids already face a lot of pressure to do well on their examinations, so schools should not burden them more.
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, there are several benefits of
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 teaching method.
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 acquire more knowledge about
plants
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 and
animals
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, which will be
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 for some subjects at school
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 as biology and science. Not only that, children can learn how to be responsible with something that they are taking care of. From there, it can create positive hobbies,
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 of watching TV or using mobile phones all day. In summary,
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 teaching knowledge about taking care of
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 and growing
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 elementary
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 may have some drawbacks, the advantages of
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 teaching method
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 undeniable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • primary children
  • grow vegetables
  • keep animals
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • practical skills development
  • environmental awareness
  • health benefits
  • instilling responsibility
  • learning about food production
  • time commitment
  • maintenance costs
  • safety concerns
  • curriculum constraints
  • limited resources
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