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In many countries, schoolchildren are required to wear school uniforms. Do you think should this be enforced in all schools?

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Educational systems have been faced with so many conflicts and opinions, and dress code is one of them;
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, quite a few educational associations are in believe that students should dress like each other.
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 there seems to be a uniform that helps pupils to be as same as each other, I
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believe that our appearance and clothes are optional.
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, I strongly believe that our optional selection paves the way for innovation, and school is the foundation of a society
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people learn
there
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how to be innovators and pioneers. So, by applying oriented approaches and tightening up the laws against optional choices, you will destroy an innate skill of the pupil.
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, having been restricted by unethical and inhumane rules, a child, who was born with artistic skills, starts to break those boundaries, and
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, moral decadence will appear in all parts of society.
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, families are said to be faced with so many financial problems, and having implemented uniform rules, governments impose an extra expense on families' expenditures, and
subsequently
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, it causes a lot of conflict in society.
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, parents and authorities have been struggling with so many issues about students and studying subjects, and an unfavourable environment is one of them.
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, having been punished and forced to have the same appearance, students are about to have a great dislike of the school, and government efforts to provide friendly space for pupils will be reversed. In conclusion, I strongly believe that etiquette of wearing should not be obligatory in schools. because it can have a reversible effect on our children, and it can cause suppression of tasks, innovations, and so on, conversly, family boundaries going to be on the wane.

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