some people believe that parents should pay their children for doing household chores such as cleaning or washing dishes m, while others disagree. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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guardians
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compensation
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activities
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opine that it is hazardous .
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my opinion ,letter preposition appears to be more rationals. to commence with,There are
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of reasons behind
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one is that, Their
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diverted from
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. To explain it, To give
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to earn more
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their academic performance. To cite an example, A survey was conducted by NYU(
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University)
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department in 2015 among various
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from different states. They found that 70℅ of
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.
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why many are favors
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underlying
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stems from the fact that, They get to learn
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of
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early stage of their life.
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to use
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which developed
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attitude of saving and investing.
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of children do well
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financially
those who
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to warn from childhood.
As a result
, it is proved that why few people are approved above arguments. To
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recapitulate
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I strongly believe their drawbacks should not be overlooked.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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