The two maps below show substantial changes of an island befor and after equipment of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show substantial changes in an island before and after the equipment of some tourist facilities.

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, in both ,pictures the trees make up exist the same as ago but some accommodations , restaurants and reception are added so tourists can inhabit there.

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, before

such

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alternations there weren't any footpaths but ,

afterwards

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there are a lot of pavements created for walking

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they make some vehicle tracks for bicycling and driving but as we can see vehicles can move in a certain place so tourists can not use vehicles in all places and there are some limitations for them.

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, it can be seen before the conversions there wasn't any pier but now there is a pier for boating for tourists

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they

are prepare

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a suitable place for swimming or maybe sunbathing.

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remarkable changes ,the total location of the island are not modified . Unlike the past now

this

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island is usable for visitors.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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