The two maps below show substantial changes of an island befor and after equipment of some tourist facilities.

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The two maps below show substantial changes in an island before and after the equipment of some tourist facilities.

Overall

, in both ,pictures the trees make up exist the same as ago but some accommodations , restaurants and reception are added so tourists can inhabit there.

Moreover

, before

such

alternations there weren't any footpaths but ,

afterwards

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there are a lot of pavements created for walking

also

they make some vehicle tracks for bicycling and driving but as we can see vehicles can move in a certain place so tourists can not use vehicles in all places and there are some limitations for them.

In addition

, it can be seen before the conversions there wasn't any pier but now there is a pier for boating for tourists

also

they

are prepare

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a suitable place for swimming or maybe sunbathing.

Although

remarkable changes ,the total location of the island are not modified . Unlike the past now

this

island is usable for visitors.

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6 paragraphs

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6.00

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The two maps below show substantial changes of an island befor and after equipment of some tourist facilities.

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In today's world many people own a smartphone Do you think advantages of owning a smartphone outweigh the disadvantages

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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others claim that schools should give reward to those who show improvement. Discuss these two mind.