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Many supermarkets sell more and more imported food products than ones produced in their home country. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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It is undeniable that supermarkets are selling imported
food
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 products, more than local
food
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 in the home
country
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, and the demerits of
this
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 trend outweigh the merits,
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 essay will explore the reasons with relevant examples in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, bringing
food
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 from abroad provides an opportunity for natives to taste the foodstuff,
that is
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 impossible for them to acquire in the same
country
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, in 2011, India had no taste for the Kiwi fruit, which is Newzealand's prominent fruit,
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, it famed for its taste and remedy to cure the deficiency of Vitamin C, the time, it was imported by the major supermarket of Delhi.
In addition
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, not only does, the government earn the margin between the seller and buyer, but it
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 generates revenue from the imported duty and tax, which was regulated during importation. Yet there is another side of the picture, proponents become more adaptable to foreign cuisine which shrinks,
as well as
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, the popularity and value of local
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, and revenue of local sellers. In the year 2023, numerous people were recorded for buying only frozen vegetables, which were purchased from other continents,
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, only some people touched the fresh vegetables, and in
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 case, the hard work of farmers is not getting rewarded, how the system can think about huge margin from the locally produced
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.
As a result
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, leaning toward imported
food
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 rather than home
country
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 goods has detrimental effects on the everyday worker's income and the nation's economy.
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, after analyzing both sides, there is no doubt that, the usage of overseas edibles has adverse effects on the value of local, which
also
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 leads to instability of the economic condition of the home
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, that's why the drawbacks outweigh the benefits of imported
food
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 sell by supermarkets.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to present your main arguments in a clearer and more organized way. Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single point and connects logically to other paragraphs.
task achievement
Ensure your examples clearly illustrate your points and are relevant to the discussions about imported food versus local food.
task achievement
You've effectively introduced the topic and presented both advantages and disadvantages of imported food products.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imported food products
  • local produce
  • broad variety
  • catering to diverse tastes
  • economic benefits
  • international trade relations
  • quality and safety standards
  • logistics
  • distribution
  • local farmers
  • domestic agriculture
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • cultural homogenization
  • traditional cuisines
  • consumer choices
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