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Some people believe that free housing should be provided by governments for under-priviliged and people who can't afford to buy a house. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give example based on your own experience.

In recent years, the issue of homelessness and affordable housing has sparked significant debates. Some
people
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 argue that the
government
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 should arrange free-house facilities for those who are economically disadvantaged. I strongly agree with
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together
 is a fundamental human right for their future growth. First and Foremost, living under the roof. of the house plays a vital role in fostering "Social cohesion and economic stability.
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 means that
people
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 who are not financially strong- able to have security and good
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; leading to the Vicious cycle of poverty in the country.
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 the Hindustan Times, more than 65% of
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 face immense challenges in India and the
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also
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 supports them in giving basic housing Infrastructure as a safety net from poverty.
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, providing free or subsidised housing is an Investment in long-term economic productivity.
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 factor emphasises that big implementation will decline crime rates, insecurity, and lack of sanitation and
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. To illustrate, Countries like Finland have adopted the policy of housing first. In
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 plan, folk can live permanently in the
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's free house until their job and some other personal issues to fulfil basic human rights and empower themselves to rebuild their
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.
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, the
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 can cover all the demands of their residents.
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, according to some
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 groups, it has bad Consequences as a group,
People
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 can use its misuse.
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 abuse. In Conclusion,
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 Certain
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 think it has a negative impact; dignity security,
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 and social Cohesion are the main positive outcomes of free housing for the underprivileged to help to fly their wings during economic instability

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You present a clear opinion that supports free housing for the underprivileged.
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You use relevant examples to support your argument, such as the situation in India and Finland.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • free
  • housing
  • governments
  • underprivileged
  • afford
  • buy
  • house
  • safe
  • place
  • live
  • need
  • stable
  • home
  • health
  • job
  • opportunities
  • improve
  • lives
  • families
  • children
  • secure
  • environment
  • grow
  • learn
  • living
  • costs
  • economy
  • taxes
  • fund
  • basic
  • need
  • met
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