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Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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It is true that some people argue that a foreign
language
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 should not be one of the compulsory subjects studied in schools.
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 I believe that it is useful for schoolchildren to learn a foreign
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, I completely agree that they should not be forced to do so. On the one hand, it will benefit the education of most
children
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 if they are encouraged to learn a foreign
language
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 during their school years.
Firstly
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, through studying the terminology they will learn about the culture of that country, and some schools even arrange exchange visits, to enable students to briefly immerse themselves in the culture of the foreign country whose
language
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 they are learning.
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,
children
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 can access information in another dialect.
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, if they are studying English, they can enjoy websites which are only available in English on any topic in which they are interested.
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,
children
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 can be encouraged to learn a foreign
language
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 through the range of enjoyable and fun materials available nowadays, especially interactive online learning.
On the other hand
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, it would be counterproductive to forcibly oblige schoolchildren to learn a foreign
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. One reason is that
children
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 will not learn effectively through compulsion alone. They must be motivated to do so and
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 is only achieved through enthusiastic teachers who select stimulating
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-learning activities. Another reason is that schoolchildren will be reluctant to learn a foreign accent if they cannot see why it might be relevant to their present or future lives.
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, individual Vietnamese pupils should not be forced to learn English if they are certain that they will never need or want to use it in the future. In conclusion, I would argue that schools should encourage, but not compel,
children
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 to learn a foreign accent.
Submitted by Md. Anwar Hossain on

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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Stick to this essay structure:

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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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