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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

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The world population
grow
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 is creating worries about
food
 demand and
offer
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offers
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 in the future.
Therefore
 one option has been found
out
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apply
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, and it is insects transformed
to
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into
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 human
food
.
However
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 there
are
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 some opposition
about
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 it and
this
 essay will discuss some positive and negative effects of
this
 new choice of
food
over
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 human health. Specialists say that there is not enough land to plant and produce
food
 for the
further
 growing population. And so, other sources of
food
 are being sought in order to
fulfill
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 the increasing demand tendency. One of them was found in insects, for the protein and nutrients biologists say they have, especially on their crater.
However
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 there are some harmful reasons to discard
this
 option as the only
backward
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. Harms might concern not only
to
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 their potential to spread out sickness as disease vectors but
also
to
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with
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the
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their
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 impact on
natural
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the natural
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 feeding chain, as they have the duty to banish some parasites from the crops. As a balance, Have
plantation
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plantations
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 be hindered by parasites
food
 production would in sum be prejudiced.
Therefore
, the drawbacks far overweight the benefits. In conclusion, the risk
on
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 health and nature by eating insects does not worth it as a
food
 complement to the lack of
food
 in
face
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 of the increasing demand.
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