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Some people believe that educating people about the natural world is the most effective way to protect the environment. Other say there are more effective ways to protect the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #world #environment
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last
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populaion
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population
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increase
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 day by by and still is growing. Here,
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the manger
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manger
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manager
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problems
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problem
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 facing
this
 century now is
growing
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the growing
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population
. Now we are going to
near
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the near
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furture
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future
 and facing many critical problems, so
this
 essay will discuss
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and highlight
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 overpopulation causes and effects of
this
problem
 and which is solution
of
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this
problem
. Let’s begin with,
this
 is true that we are facing plentiful and serious problems and the first reason
of
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behind
is
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 joint families and
birth
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the birth
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 of number
children
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of children
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 without any
futhure
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future
further
plainting
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planting
painting
. People are not following
government
 rules
as well as
authority
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authorities
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 should action on individuals
However
,
awarness
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awareness
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masses
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the masses
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 of
bad
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the bad
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 effect
of
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on
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 the number of children. Here,
number
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a number
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 of
problem
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problems
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 are facing kind of they does not provide good education, much better
takecare
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take care
 of their wards as best hospitality.
For instance
,
government
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the government
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 should
given
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sechme
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scheme
 and
benefits
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the benefits
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of
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less
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 kids. To
execuite
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execute
 in humans through
the
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social media.
Furthermore
, people
following
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follow
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 their
tradation
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tradition
traditions
such
 as
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the birth
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birth
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birthing
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many
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of many
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 kids in
familes
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families
 and they
does
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do
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 not
changed
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this
 tradition,
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the other
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other
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another
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 reason is
uneducation
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education
 in massas because they know about
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 of
population
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the population
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.
This
 is the pivotal reason
of
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 overpopulation
Although
 we are facing
unemployeement
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unemployment
 and
impovarment
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improvement
empowerment
.
government
 should
penailty
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penalty
 or charge on
those mankind
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that mankind
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 and awar to
youngester
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youngster
youngsters
 who that aware to other uneducated people
moreover
 rural areas. For
exmple
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example
china
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China
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 is
most
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the most
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population
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populated
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 country in the world but now
india
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India
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 is the first highest
population
 country
according to
 the annual report.
To
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conclution
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conclusion
,
government
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the government
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 should hard action on
this
manger
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manager
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problem
 as far as it is very
dangrious
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dangerous
 for
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the futhure
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futhure
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future
 so that we will
can
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suffered
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 in future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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